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They are working now, aside from Jacqueline, the one I probably know the least of.

Yes, your dialogue reminded me a lot of Erica. When I think of Erica I always end up wanting to focus on tragedy, which isn't really the most rounded portrayal. You have the tragedy, but also some of the self-absorption which is endearing.

I love Erica going along with the cost-cutting. I wonder how she would have reacted to going to Canada.

Great start. A lot of the photos didn't come up for me.

I like the idea of Viki getting out of Llanview, as it's what I kept hoping would happen for her (too bad she is stuck with Clint, who probably fled due to criminal charges...). Your dialogue for Erica and Bianca is right on the nose. Great to see Blair on her own, with Jack in juvie...er...boarding school. And I love that Tina is in the background somewhere.

You packed a lot of scenes and characters into this. I can see you put so much time and effort in. A very satisfying read. I like the way you eased Kim and Bob back in, so many great scenes with the veterans, like Bob and John. You really have that feeling of community and history which ATWT excelled at. I just hope that eventually Julie might be in your story not just as the constantly sick mother, which I hated on ATWT.

I really enjoyed reading the quick banter between Lisa/Barbara/Carly. You do a great job with Carly's reactions and comments. I wish the show had done something like this, especially since they never bothered to reconcile Carly and Lisa.

Great. I like all the bitching between Lucinda and Lisa, with John enjoying the show. The last line by Carly is a classic.

I like how you're continuing the stories the show ended on, but giving your own twist. I also like the way you show the photos of various sets. I think this is a great start, although I thought the dialogue for Margo and Katie was OOC.

Great ending. I'm glad Rachel got to find out in a happy way. I also like how Charlie's guilt over Frankie is making her try to influence Kirkland.

I think Amanda fell back into bed with Allen kind of fast.

Great chapter. Can't wait to see what happens with Nicole.

Great cliffhanger. And it's nice to know more about the past between Jack and Paulina, with Remy as their tie.

Nice to see that you let us see all these reunions.

I forgot to add how much I loved the in-joke about Iris and Alexandra.

Fantastic chapter. I'm so glad you continued with the thread about Iris and her grandkids - I felt so sorry for her when Dennis wouldn't let them see her.

Great to see Allen and Nicole meeting, which will hopefully make Allen feel guilty (although I think Donna always knew about Marley, she just never knew about Vicky, as Reginald paid Bridget to leave with Vicky at birth).

Nice to see the news about Carl slowly trickling in.

For a minute I forgot Gregory was Sharlene's son - I guess he's not thinking about her at the moment.

I was thinking of the Paulina stuff too.

Great suspense in this, multiple characters in danger, all their stories tied together. Grant's ruthlessness works well here as it's done for a reason, to protect people.

Dolores was crazy trash so I fear for that kid.

No. She just shot him. Peter left town alive and well in late 1987, saying he was tired of being Reginald's lackey.

Love the Donna/Nicole scene. I'm glad you included this and her wondering why Donna couldn't help her. I wish Peter were involved too.

Great chapter.

Is Dolores another Jack/Carly child or is his mother back?

This is so unique. I really enjoyed it. I'm glad Mitch is still alive. I wish this had been in one of the chapters but I can see where they were so action-packed this may not have fit. I'm glad we got to hear more about her last days with Carl. Was she saying he'd just disappeared, or committed suicide?

I'm glad you included Tyrone, who is more of a supporting character in the story (so far). The dialogue didn't quite sound like him to me, but it was still great.

I like that you brought up Evan's past murder attempt on Carl.

Kinky Amanda...I wonder when Cameron will find out about Allan.

Well I definitely wasn't expecting that!

The conflict between the twins over Carl is also fascinating, and built up nicely, just in time for his return. Nice pacing.

Great chapter. I love this line:

Fantastic cliffhanger!

It's the fourth time for Felicia, but she may not care to remember Nikos (can't blame her!). Lorna has lost so much too.

I like how you touch on the many kids in Bay City who have lost a parent, and how Mitch's death affects them.

Beautifully written, if heartbreaking.